In 2006, I entered a competition for a piece of writing in Easy-Read English -- the adaptation of language for people with learning difficulties. My entry didn't get anywhere in the competition, and, not seeing any other market for it, I let it stay in the depths of filespace.
Recently, however, I came across an opportunity to revamp it. The Up-Goer Five Text Editor enables you to type text using only the 1000 commonest words in English. I copied my 2006 piece into Up-Goer Five, and was told immediately that many of my words fell outside that thousand.
The list of prescribed words is indeed an amazing one. Block, blonde, and blood are in it, all in a row, but not sing, clap, or war. Does anyone know how far Up-Goer Five matches the vocabulary used by practitioners of Easy-Read? Where I didn't find synonyms, I set about excising passages rather than writing longer explanations. This operation shortened the thing from 674 words to 479.
The result is below (and on Up-goer Five here). Easy-Read and the constraints of Up-Goer Five can be likened to txtspk, Twitterspeak, and the Victorians' telegramese -- adaptations of English for a particular purpose, and most unlikely to be the future of English prose. But constraints can be stimulating. Think of the 14 lines of the sonnet!
I must give credit where credit is due. My coming across Up-goer Five was thanks to Dixe Wills' article in the Christian magazine Third way.
MUSIC ABOUT FIGHTING
We are working on a big piece of music. It is by Mr Britten.
We start working on it in the cold. The music seems strange. Parts of it are not what we expect. We go wrong.
I look over my music book on trains. We are getting there.
we get closer to the date, we work harder. One evening, we try the
music with the band and the kids. We go wrong in new ways. Is it
because we are not used to the band?
I ride home very fast. The music feels like the ride. It is under control.
we try again, in another building. The stars join us for the first
time. I go wrong in more new ways. The ride home is shorter.
the date, we try the music in the afternoon. Many of us come by car.
They are late because of road works. I go wrong in parts of the music
that were all right before. The music feels much harder now.
The time comes.
give the music sitting down to begin with. The music starts quietly,
with deep notes and bells and us. We get through the first part and
don't go too wrong. But by the end of the second part we have gone
wrong in places.
The music has six parts. The last part is the
hardest. We know we have gone wrong in many places already. Can we get
through this hard part?
We struggle. We know we are struggling.
Lots of people have come to hear us. Do they know we are struggling?
Will we have to stop? The man waves his stick to lead us. His waves
get bigger and clearer.
The music ends as it began. It ends quietly with bells and us.
our last note the man puts his stick down. Then everyone is silent
for a long time. The music has made us all want to be silent.
someone makes a noise with their hands. The noise means "We like the
music." Then others join in. They make a loud noise with their hands
for several minutes. The stars lean forward. Leaning forward means
"Thank you for liking us." The kids and the band and the small band all
lean forward. And we too get asked to lean. Thank you for liking us.
We walk off the raised floor. My wife comes to meet me with a friend of ours. They tell me how much they liked the music.
Other people are saying the same thing to their friends. They did not notice we were struggling.
know we were struggling. We know we could have done it better. But
the music has worked. It was beautiful. It has made people think about
what fighting is like.
Listen to Mr Britten's music if you can!